A poem i wrote, rate plz?

Question: A poem i wrote, rate plz!?

there is no word for goodbye

looking through a net of wrinkles
i see ur eyes and a beautiful twinkle
the deep dark color in the sea
when i stare you look back at me

looking through a net of wrinkles
i see ur smile that shines like sprinkles
the honest words thatcome from you
stay in my mind because theyre true

looking through a net of wrinkles
i see much deeper and there are no wrinkles
i see ur heart and i know ur smart
with age it warms the heart
and thats the thing that sets u apart!.

-forget the grammar just mind the poem, rate it any suggestions and the first line as the title "there is no word for goodbye"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

that is ah-mazing!!!!!!
i love it!
thats like my favorite poem ever!

rating 10 being the best, 1 being the worst:
150
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it didn't really get my attention, i was kinda zoning in and out through the first stanza, i wasn't very intrigued by it either!. I stopped reading halff way through, can you explain it a little more!? I want to know what the poem was supposed to be about, symbolism, language, and significance please!. I never knew sprinkles could shine either, im enlightened!. If i were you i would work to reword the last stanza!. Its a pretty good poem but my aadvice is to shape it a little bit, it gives it more meaning believe it or not!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No word for Goodbye

Looking through a net of wrinkles
I see your eyes and a beautiful twinkle
Deep, dark color, turbulent sea
I stare and you look back at me

Looking through a net of wrinkles
I see your smile that shines like sprinkles
Honest words, spoken, true
stay in my mind, I think of you

Looking through a net of wrinkles
I see your heart, depth and love!.!.!.

It's pretty! I would just work on the last paragraph to make it 4 sentences like the other paragraphs!. I played with a couple of words!. Are you in love with an older man!? 8 )Www@QuestionHome@Com

its pretty intruging!. =] the ryhme scheme is pretty rehersed, but the style is very, i want to say simple, and easy to follow!. which is good at times, but using longer and more difficult words would give it more depth!. =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's good!.

But honestly it shouldn't matter what we think!. We don't understand the feelings behind it!. It's your poem about something that you feel!. If you like it then that's all that matters!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hmmmmmm!.

Not toooo bad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Nice!Www@QuestionHome@Com

was this poem wrote for your very old lover who likes ice cream!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

there is something wrong with the first line, your lyingWww@QuestionHome@Com

omg that poem is so nice where did u come up with that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

mehWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like your thought!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its cuteWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!!! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice!. =]]
i liked how u made them rhyme!.
i never can make them rhyme =/Www@QuestionHome@Com

4!.5/5Www@QuestionHome@Com