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Question: My first attempt at poetry! I realize it's pretty bad!!?
So I DO NOT write poetry at all!. But I just jotted this down out of boredom!. Again, I AM NOT in any way a poet, so please be nice! lol So with that said, what do you think!? It's about my whore ex!.

So bright your youth shone
The December day you stole my heart away
I was broken, off my throne
Never had my heart felt such a sway

I waited and rejected your advances
But never I would know
All this time I was using up my chances
As my feeling began to grow

But then I realized
Others could steal you away so fast
Without knowledge, attempts, completely unrealized
My heart's chance had passed

Flirtations turned bitter
We were aggressive, unaware, and shameless
It was love!. It was hate!. Salt tears had glitter!.
Yet you were aimless, blameless!. I was in your book nameless!.

You went too far
Womanizing hurt more than you would ever know
In my empty heart, there is a scar
You definitely put on a show

Summer went by, I missed you
June was lonesome and filled with betrayal
I was a wreck, you were dancing through
Never would I show you this portrayal

July was when it occurred
You came up to me, as if we were so close
It was funny how your smile made the past blur
My pain began to melt!. Laughter replaced the woes!.

I forgave you!.

But you wanted more
You asked for myself but not for my love
I was blinded and showed you the door
Your requests, undreamed of

You wouldn't give up, you said it was love
I almost gave in
But push came to shove
My world began to spin

You were caught
And you apologized
I forgave but never forgot
I felt so uncivilized

We agreed to start over, running from a lie
Now 8 months since December, you still have my heart
We hide what happened that July
My love, why won't you depart!?

I talk to you, we're still hunter and pray
Caught you glancing at me
We know things shouldn't be this way
Going back and forth, we're supposed to be freeWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
um!.!.!. wow you have a natural talent or something!. While sometimes rhyming can be bad, you did it extremely well!. If you took a class or two you could be extremely good!. Are you SURE this is your first time!? Write more poetry and get it published!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its good!. i love your way of expression but you seem to put your words in thew wrong order but you're still pretty good!. GOOD LUCK! ( in poetry)


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somehow im not convinced that was your first time writing poetry!. especially since i am a writer myself!. my first poems were quite a mess!. i think that you dont give yourself enough credit!. its no bad at all although the rhythm is a bit messed up in certain areas, its pretty good!. =] nice emotion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com