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Question: Can you rate my poem please!?
I want to know from your rating of how to improve this poem that I did!.
It is titled: The Funeral is Endless

Sworn to condemn- Sworn to unveil darker skies
The funeral is endless- Death is endless
And all that you have lived for is meaningless
For in that hour, all will be made as dust
One rise of the sun- One going down thereof

The clock waits for noone
Midnight is almost here
And when it does arrive
There is no turning back!.

Lamentations of utter emptiness
Resounding triumphantly- death has won!.
And the melodies of the church organ
Echoing waveforms of his voice
Shall haunt the souls of those not suffering!.

Pitch Black skies above the Church
Reigning with the dense furor
That lies in the heart of death
And the greed of them who died
Will continue to shadow
The perishing land below!.
The Funeral is endless!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Couldn't face more than the first 1 1/2 lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yeah not my style either!. but i can tell you worked really hard on this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Eh, not my style but well written!. I'd say 7 out of 10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com