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Question: Is my poetry good or is it bad!?!?
i wrote this a couple of years ago when i was 12 but be honest

Who, when I am sad, wipes away my tears
Who always comforts me against my fears
Who compliments me when I am good
Who gives me lots of hugs like every mother should
Who has a hand that leads the way
Who has a smile to brighten my everyday
The answer is found in the woman who never grows old
And whose heart is made of pure gold


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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
woah!.!.!.!. when you said 12 i was like "it won't be that good" but WOW you impressed me!!! i almost dropped a tear when i was reading it!!! i reallllllly liked it because I could relate to it sooooo much!!!
Great Great Great Great Great Great Job!!!!!
And continue on the good work!!!
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Good for a 12 year old! I really liked the first 6 lines and how they were going to reach a great climax, but I was rather disappointed with your ending couplet!. It made your poem stumble a bit!. Line 7 had 14 syllables and line 8 had only 8, and compared to the first lines of your poem, it was quite shallow!.

But, overall, I think this was a good effort!. well done!

Keep rading more poetry (good poetry) and Keep writing!.!.!.
I'm always available if you needed any help!.

Good luck :)

Your friend,
Lulle


P!.S Please ignore those who just write empty compliments like "Ooh I loved it" or "you mad me cry" and garbage like that, they understand nothing about poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is beautiful
It indeed talks about emotions
both sad and happy
for example sad and tears
and a smile that brightens my day
The person who does all this is
the woman who has a heart of gold!.
comforting from fear is another line
that is touching
this is reassuring


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good and if thee like it even better

why worry what other think if you enjoy writing carry on

And whose heart is made of pure gold
and keep thee warm when you are cold
and make you feel grand and bold
so you keep her in your when you our very old


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It's good for what a 12 or 13 year old writes Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good as long you mean it!Www@QuestionHome@Com