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Question: What do you think about these poems that I wrote a while back!? I don't mind criticism!.!?
1
The mist settles peacefully
The leaves fall gently
The breeze drifts by
The roses try not to dry
Nature makes its place
All by gods grace

#2
I watch the rain pour into the bottomless depths of the ocean
Realizing the rain and the ocean have no choice being together
But you have the choice to be the rain and
fall into the endless depths of my love!.

#3
I dont live for the years
Nor for the days
I dont live for the hours
or for the minutes
I live for the seconds
The seconds with you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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Hi there Thinker

Wow did you really write these words !? Awesome you really got a creative mind,,I decided to give you my honest opinion so i put my full concentration and focus on your question as i read your poems, I really must tell you that this has never happened to me and i do love reading so Ive read alot but never has this happened to me!. As I was reading your poems i thought about what you were saying and your words were deep i was touched!? Let me explain Well here Im sitting in my bedroom, its been soooo Hot all day Ive been Feeling the heat wave I live in Sacramento Ca, My air conditioner gave out on me today so Ive been using cold wet clothes to wipe my face and neck to fight off the heat Its been a bummer and i cant get them to come fix it until Monday so you know im frustrated feeling the heat!.!.!.eeeyikes;; anyway as i was reading about the mist and the breeze and the rain and ocean etc!.!.!.!. i began to feel this sense of coolness throughout my body almost like a cool breeze for a while i had forgotten the heat then when you talked about love it was heart warming lately its been hard for me so as i kept reading the feeling of Sweetness and hope brought a smile to my face!.!.!.Fantastic feeling oooh lalala thumbs up and more power to you It was an experience ill never forget!. So dont forget me when your a Rich and famous writer ok
hahaha
good luck Buena Suerte IrmaWww@QuestionHome@Com

you don't mind criticism
yet you don't say how do you feel about
compliments,
because that is what makes more sense
at this place and time!.
Beautful depth, insightful rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poetry is beautiful and very insightful!. If you choose to follow a path of being a poet, you have a very bright future!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

too short!. what am i saying!. i hardly know a thing about poetry!. sounds!.!.!.okay!. just have fun and don't try to hard!. something will come, and when it does try to write it down at that moment, unless u have good memory!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the first and the last poem!.The second seems a bit forced!.Www@QuestionHome@Com