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A Shack on Mary’s drive

On Mary’s Drive I dwell
Accompanied by few
To this day I’m the smallest shack
Mary’s drive has ever knew
Surrounding me are houses
Much bigger, much more strong
Their walls are covered in hard red brick
Material for which I long
They were shacks once long ago
This fact I know as true
Yet unlike me made out of tree
Received they materials new
Within those brick lined walls
Lies a group of their own breed
Families known as “the nation’s best”
Fill their homes with greed
A shack on Mary’s Drive
On Mary’s Drive I dwell
My walls are old and wooden
Far from an easy sell
With all these facts against me
I cannot help but grin
I’m much too old and tiny
Yet somehow I still win
Look past my broken hinges
Look through my window small
Deep within me, a group of three
They’ve close to nothing at all
As they look upon their neighbors
I look upon mine
We may not have those hard red bricks
But we’ll remain just fine
What we possess is FAMILY
And yes that is a wealth
We’ll stick together through the rain
Through sickness and through health
-ME- <33333
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I admire not only your poem but also you as a person!. The way you think and your simplicity like in the words that you use in your poem is awesome!. Congrats, write some more!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think the idea you have and the message you are trying to give with this poem is good, but I think it needs a little work!. Some parts of it are like a limerick (that type of poetry that you kind of read in a sing-song way where you're like bobbing your head) but other parts aren't so it doesn't read very fluently!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i'm sorry, i couldn't get through it!. the end rhyme is killing me slowly!. it's better than most of the stuff people post on here!. but i can't stand the end rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I actually liked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

liked it!.!.!. kind of confusingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow thats GREAT!

i wouldn't change anything really! =)
keep up the great work!Www@QuestionHome@Com