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Question: Your opinion on this poem i wrote !?
I heard your voice once again
Strange that I should be talking to you
Your words stab like daggers
And everything you do
Everything you say
Makes me miss you more and more
I wounder why
Why should i hurt
Why should i feel pain
Like this is fair
Inever chose to end it all
The moment we ended it all
Should've made me better
Made you sadder
You knoe what you did,yet
Instead I just lay here writing
Because I dont know what else to do
Because sleep doesn't come easy
When your mind is racing
With thoughts about someone you love
Who once loved you back
Or at least said they say
Past memiories like
Ghosts that I can't run away from
It felt as if
I lost my mind
Just as i lost you
Actually
You were never there anyway
It was only an echo
Bouncing of the walls of my heart
Repeating every painful memory
All the moments we shared
I don't know what else to do
Who else to turn to
I didnt want to dream
Because once shattered
But no i realize
All of this was one long dream
I can't go on writing
It pains me so
But its the only thing that gets me through the day
These words
Straight from the heart
And I don't know if you would realise
How different life is
Without you here by my side
But like you said
It's for the better
Somehow I feel worse
Than where I was before
But i realize i am better off
I deserve better
I spent my time on you
Tryin to please the impossible
Now your nothing more than a Ghost
The shadow you've casted
No longer lingers by me
An i realize
I've got to love again
But who an how!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
David,

Am I wrong to say that there's a lot of broken hearted people in the world and that women are evil and cruel!? Because that is all I read on this post and where men get all in touch with their feelings by writing about love lost! Have I ever suffered a break up!? Oh you bet I have, that's why I'm A Blues songwriter!. Next time tell us how you really feel!.!.!. Grade BWww@QuestionHome@Com

love sucks, I should know
TFL cares, that'll be $27!.50Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. It's very true and easy for many readers to relate to!. Just check up on your spelling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. And it's not to hard to understand!. Well done :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

sounds sick n stupid!.!.!.!.u r so not talentedWww@QuestionHome@Com

What is my opinion of your poem!? This poem is definitely a display of your feelings and of course no one likes to see or hear about another person hurting!. Your work explains exactly what you are going through!. I'm relieved that the last lines takes you out of this struggle, in that, you realize you have to love again!.

Good work! !.!.!. but somewhat depressing which is to be understood, because love "ain't" always pretty!.

Take Care!.!.!.!. keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com