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Staring at the garden I wonder Why don't black roses grow And why dont white roses come with blood But right now all I want Is my lack Rose From Mr Right Poem 2 Every night laying in bed Fighting the pain Fighting the tears Wanting iit all to end Oh how i wish that it all could just end and then I pray when I wake up I find that it is All just a dream And that it never Really Happened Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I like the first one especially!. In some ways it seems to be quite a traditional poem - you're wondering why Mr Right won't turn up with a rose!. Simple!. BUT!.!.!.at the same time the poem shows that your feelings aren't simple, and they aren't traditional!. You want a black rose - not the colour normally associated with love or romance!. And then the line "and why white roses don't come with blood" - this could be read in a few ways: 1) blood is red, the colour of traditional romance / roses, so you're wondering why the roses you CAN grow (i!.e!. the feelings that you DO feel) doesn't fit into traditional or "normal" ideas!. 2) blood could also be a symbol of courage or strength (as in "bloodless" to describe something weak or boring) - so you're wondering why you don't find so-called "pretty" flowers (i!.e!. normal ideas of romance) to be interesting or stimulating!. 3) you see the white rose as a symbol of yourself, and you're wondering why you can't be stronger and take command of your feelings better 4) "come with blood" could also mean that you have put your own blood - i!.e!. your hard work and passion - into growing the roses, but they still won't "come" (i!.e!. flower / bloom)!. So you're wondering why even though you've totally committed yourself to finding love, it still hasn't happened!. And in the last line, i love that typo, you wrote "lack" instead of "black" which is sort of fitting - this is a poem about the "lack" of something after all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com everything after 'black roses grow' was crap!. Read the Nightengale and the Rose by Hans Christen Andersen!. Www@QuestionHome@Com They are good if your a dark souled person!. Try to think more positive and make brighter poems to light people up, instead of darkening their ideas!.Www@QuestionHome@Com They need more of a sense of rhythm, at the moment they look like prose broken up into lines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Shakespeare hates your emo poems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com LOVE THEM! very descrpitive and emotional! dont listen to the others they dont have a poetic side i think you've used metaphors wisely and alot of people could relate well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com poem 1 the last line says lack rose from mr!.!.!. poem 2 4th line double i in the itWww@QuestionHome@Com to be Honest these are great and passionate poems but they lack something and i'm not sure what!?!?!!Www@QuestionHome@Com depressing, sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com NOT BAD B+Www@QuestionHome@Com okWww@QuestionHome@Com sad but not bad =)Www@QuestionHome@Com very expressive,good,looks like u have great sorrowWww@QuestionHome@Com |