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You said you’d never be like him
You said you’d never break my heart
You said you’d be here day and night
You said we’d never be apart
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him
You guys are too related
Did you think you could penetrate me
Did you think I’d like being impailed
Did you think I wanted to be hurt
Cause if that was your plan, I’d say it failed
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him
You guys are too related
You’re just like him
Stabbing me in the back
Did you honestly think
You could make me crack
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him
You guys are too related
This is such a twist in my story
So very unexpected
And ‘til there’s someone worthy
Of love I’ll be neglected
But now I can be free
No more stress from a bunch of guys
No more cold and wet pillows
From crying out my eyes
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him
You guys are too related
But I must ask you now
Was it a surprise
So soon I got over you
Because I was being wise
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him
You guys are too related
You’re just like him
The guy you said you hated
But you’re just like him Www@QuestionHome@Com
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This is a really good poem!. It kept me reading it i didn't get bored in the first line because it is true stuff!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The only problem with it being a song is the irregularity of your verses!. Your first verse is okay 88!.88, and your refrain, although not metric, is uniformly 47!.57 Not an easy musical match!. You've got verses that are 55!.77, 68!.76,and even 99!.910! Country music can accommodate almost any number of syllables on a note, but the rhythm has to remain constant in terms of the stressed syllables!. What tune do you put this to!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I LOVE IT, IT'S SOO REAL, IT IS LIKE YOU ARE PUTTING MY WORDS INTO A POEM AND I AGREE WITH IT 100%, HERE ARE TOO TITLE FOR THIS POEM CHOOSE ONE " JUST LIKE HIM" OR " GUYS ARE TOO RELATED" I LOVE IT ALOT, I AM WRITING IT DOWN IN MY COLLECTION RIGHT NOW!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's good! it would definitely be considered a song,
if it was a poem, the repetition would hurt the overall image!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
constructive critisism
i think its just a bit too repetetive, maybe you could add some more verses
but other than that its a great idea for a song, for a poem not so muchWww@QuestionHome@Com
Nice!Www@QuestionHome@Com