Position:Home>Poetry> What do you think about my poem? Honest but not to harsh please!?
Question: What do you think about my poem!? Honest but not to harsh please!!?
Take the breath from me
put it in my poetry
make me
break me
words are my children
poetry is fertile ground
stories are flowers growing
novels are my perfect ending!.
Please take the life from me
take it and make something beautiful!.
I don't want to leave this world
without making one perfect poem!.!.!.
Please take my sight
if you think you need my eyes
I don't want to see if the words
are not perfect
words are my children
poetry is fertile ground
stories are flowers growing
novels are my perfect endingWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
very beautiful as usual Ann!!
Here I feel that u are so eager to accomplish the perfect poem!. !. and inside your heart you know how much sacrifices you will pay to acheive your goal!.!. here you offer your sight and breath!. !.
your poems are always thirsty because they were written by a thirsty poetess who is never satisfied with this limited earthWww@QuestionHome@Com
I liked the poem!. It would be helpful to break it into stanzas, with the refrain marked!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
distinctly yours,
I rather like it well!.
Perfection however is sometimes less than perfect
Or!.!. so it seems to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com