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Question: I tried a Partenza Represa!. Does it follow the rules!?
Well, I tried Sptfyr’s original creation, the Partenza Represa!.
I believe she was the first to board Mars Ship #! and now I know why!.
And your words yesterday brought sleep until after dawn!.
Here and There
by Elaine Polin
He promised me he would deceive
deceive the Angel dark of Death
Death laughed at him, said you must leave
leave now this mortal wife bereft!.
Bereft, alone, to God I prayed
I prayed, oh Lord he must not die
he must not die, I’m so afraid
I’m so afraid, please hear my cry!.
My cry I thought He did not heed
not heed, as one year crawled to two
two years of crying out my need
my need for him, then I met you!.
I met you, stretching out your hand
your hand I grasped in rhyme and song
and song took me to a strange land
strange land that righted all Earth’s wrongs!.
All Earth’s wrongs, festering down there
down there, were transformed here on Mars
on Mars, far from Earth’s atmosphere
Earth’s atmosphere that hid the stars!.
The stars, you made them glow with light
with light and love you eased my pain
eased my pain and revived my sight
my sight you cleared, brought life again!.
(TY Poets of Mars)!.
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This is my first sighting of a Partenza Represa - and without knowing anything about the rules, I can see you have created a perfect one!.
No wonder you conked out!. The old brain must have been in dire need of rest!. I am tempted to try this!.!.!.but, I suspect it is extremely difficult!.
!.!.!.!.what am I talking about, it is near impossible!. And you say Spyt invented it!.!.!.!.what was she on at the time!?
(I might just try a couple of verses!.!.!.!.!.)
Brilliantly executed, and Sptyfyr should be too, by firing squad preferably!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Though you know I'm a bit rebellious to proper forms and structure, the last few days I have seen several examples of this form and I have to admit I love it!. It has a haunting feeling to me, with its repetition, which tugs at me, compelling and pulling me in to the poem!.
I'm so glad you found a hand to grasp, that your cries were heard and you were reborn!.
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Yes, I have heard, heard well your need
your need for everyone to heed
to heed ever forthright the call
the call to Mars soil you all!
Looks like it was fun to do, especially as the repetitiveness eased the next line (s)!. My compliments!.
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The first two stanzas got me going, however, i had trouble with the 3rd i think it was the "heed"and the "need" in the same stanza!. Overall i think this is another inspiring form that one could get their teeth into!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
I feel poetry is always honest!.!.!.And honestly, you have the form down!
the 6th stanza also expresses the feelings of many here, including me!.
and sometimes a cucumber is a phallic symbol!.!.hee!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is beautiful!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Earth's atmosphere that hid the stars!.
and the last stanza touch me deeply!. Victorious endings in spite of self
always mist my eyes with joy!.
Bravo!.
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Wonderful, superb example of the form!. A Cigar, in fact!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
88!.88, quatrain, last word of each line repeated in the next!. I'd say you did it very well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
As to the question I don't have a clue, but thanks to your poem I now have an idea of what it is!.
As to the poetry!.!.!. meter, rhyme, conformity to rules!.!.!. were all there, Do I believe it to be true!?!.!.!. absolutely, exaggerated possibly!. If it were not of you it would not be worth my time!. I am here hoping to connect through words of truth from one writer to another, to see of your hopes, dreams, realities, and perhaps to read of folly that produces laughter!.
If it is your emotion!.!.!. turned to thought!.!.!. put into words!.!.!. it is you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com