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Question: How is this Partenza Represa !?
On Our Way
by C!.S!. Scotkin
We’re on our way to Martian soil,
to Martian soil we will soon go,
we will soon go to dance and sing
and sing of all poetic things!.
Of all poetic things to write,
to write of love in ballad’s form,
in ballad’s form, we’ll write the tune,
we’ll write the tune, go past the moon!.
Go past the moon, go past the stars,
go past the stars, to planet Mars
to planet Mars, the Golden Dome
the Golden Dome, the poet’s home!.
The poet’s home where we shall stay,
where we shall stay and ever play
ever play and poetry write
poetry write, into the night!.
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I love it!. One suggestion if I may - V1 "we soon will go" sounds smoother for me!. But it is not my poem, so I'll shush now!.!.!.!.
tra-l tra-la tra-la tra-la!! I'm skipping with the rhythm!.
Dancing, dancing around La Lune
Around La Lune, we sing in tune
We sing in tune, departing soon
Departing soon, prepare the moon!
Prepare the moon, for our delight
For our delight, both day and night
Both day and night, po-ets will write
Po-ets will write, with all their might
With all their might, their words regale
Their words regale and never fail
And never fail, their voices sail
Their voices sail on starry trail!.
It's like Shari and Lambchops "Neverending song"
"This a song that doesn't end
and it goes on and on my friend
Somebody started singing it
Not knowing what it was
And then continued singing it
Forever just because!.!.!.!.
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That is a great form!.!.!.hehehe ;)
It's great!. I love how this form allows the poets voice really come through despite the repetition!. I also like your theme which lives in the hearts of many Y!Poets and the Poets of Mars!. Excellent job!. I'm going to have to write another!. You and Eva have just flown with this baby!.!.!.It makes a mommy proud!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A lovely and lively bit of invention!. Regardless of what the astronomers tell us, Mars has never been closer to Earth than it is right now, or we any closer to heaven!. Thank you my talented friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have read a few of this style,,, none have had the ease of flow and balanced rhythm you obtained in this piece!.
VERY well constructed!.
A completely pleasurable read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This one sings perfectly! I am packed and ready to go!! I was thinking some wine to go with the poetry, what does everyone like!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love this form and your poem!.
Maybe I'll try to do one at 3 AM tomorrow morning!. It seems to be the only time I can concentrate on writing!.
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I loved it and thank you for teaching me with this fine example of this form of poetry!.
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