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Question: Just wondering what others think!?
I wrote this for my brother's english class, his was a lot worse and needed help!. Hey what are siblings for!. It received honorable mention in a poetry contest, but I was wondering what everyone else thought!.

My Temple

I sit in front of it like it is my temple, and I have come to worship!.
Stretching my arms and fingers, I roll my neck and ready myself!.
I press the buttons lovingly, hoping not to mis-strike!.
The hours speed by like seconds, days do not exist!.

My eyes, fingers, and brain ache, but I cannot leave!.
I grow tired, but I fear missing one moment of its short life!.
Food does not matter now, nor does drink!.
For my game, my temple, provides everything I shall ever need!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I liked the poem, the idea, and way the topic is introduced!. Work on evening out the flow and structure!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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