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Sitting here trying to find something to write i cant seem to forget that night the night i let it all go when i walked away from you my tear soaked shirt filled with emotions i promise baby i promise i will never leave and now I'm walking away from the only thing that made me feel that way so i have a feel words left to say please baby don't let me walk away don't let me say this is good bye cause i miss you now more then ever i feel so empty sitting alone with my thoughts that are left over like the dinner from last night that i ate alone i pick up the phone bu i just couldn't get past the dial tone there was so much left to say the words i taught of slip off my tongue when i talk to you the truth is baby i love you i need you and i miss you with all my heart i just want to say sorry I'm sorry for walking away I'm sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you have really good content, and yes I would say you have talent!.
but please please please please break it up into lines & add punctuation!.
it throws the reader off!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the plain white tees should hire you to write hey there delilah pt 2Www@QuestionHome@Com

way coolWww@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.sweet!Www@QuestionHome@Com

its pretty good i rate 7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com