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Omg I have found the truth the truth in all your lies that you have told me sense i was a little boy i believed every word i believed i was suppose to feel like dirt i believed i was suppose to be the very thing you hated oh mother were you wrong to treat me so badly you hated me and now look what your hate has brought me it has give-in me this gift that i call my curse so now ill cease the chance and take this all away ill grab my rope and swing by the neck of the bottle that you used to drown your sorrows in ill write this sad little note of a little confused teenage boy who couldn't find any other way out but to take his own life on a dark stormy day oh how cliche this all Www@QuestionHome@Com


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Your age, profile, and posting, lead me to believe you like writing, want to be a songwriter, and have a great need to apply yourself more diligently to an education!.

Your honesty reveals bouts with guilt, sorrow, past memories of difficult times, and struggles with low self-esteem!.

Your writing shows potential, a need, and a desire to express your feelings!.

My suggestions would be for you to keep your writings in a journal!. Have a teacher to analyze them for you!. Study harder and work diligently to get a better education!.

If you can’t do that, don’t be ashamed!. Keep trying and eventually you will succeed!. Understand that you are not a victim and you are important!. Be proud of yourself and your writings!. Just work harder to be more proficient!. You can’t get all you need from these comments!.

If you have thoughts of suicide you need parental guidance, at least from an adult, a teacher, a doctor, or a pastor!. Your life is too precious to waste!. Blessings to you!. EDIT: Thanks, Aminal7!. Maybe I should say, Zack, change your thoughts!. Don't remain a victim, but rise above it !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Please dont kill yourself! To me this poem or letter to your mom reminds me of an eminem song!. I hope you can realize that you can change the hurt that you have felt your whole life!. I have a step daughter that was physically damaged at a young age!. She has turned that feeling of hurt into positive by helping others that fell victim to parental abuse!. Is this a cry for help!? if it is i hope you can get ahold of someone that can help you!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have to agree with millionairess on this one, she is a very wise person, that's why I have her as one of my contacts!. Except when she said you are not a victim, you are in many ways, and I am sorry you ever got treated like that!. Very deep and emotional, I feel for you!.
It sucks that you need a license to drive a car, but you don't need one to be a parent!Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats cool i hate my mom to it sounds like a siuiside note if you are going to kill yourself dont just do what i did get good grades so you can get a scholarship to a collage faraway and never talk to her again ( she abandoned me and my brother on several occasions in our lives among other things)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dam man i feel your pain!. Very deep shyt!. I used to write poetry and sum was kinda dark!. U definitely have talent and its good to put your negative thoughts into sumthing positive!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

good job,i liked it can you see mine pls http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index!?!.!.!.
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that's deep!.!. i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

ummm to be honest!.!. sounds like u just thought of it like no emotion really at all in it!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is so sad!.!. What is the point!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

that's really good! your wrote it!? Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Zack,

When you started this non stop rant with one of the most popular 3 letter, three worded text message quotes, you seriously ruined everything that came afterwards! It was like being surprised by pouring a little spoiled milk in my glass and instead of stopping, filling the glass up to the top just to see what it would look like!. No punctuation of any kind and non stop screaming!.!.!. it is laziness no matter if I like the subject matter or not (and I really do by the way)!. Master the work of the English language and you will become this awesome writer that you inspire to be,,, Grade B+Www@QuestionHome@Com