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Question: My poem!. Comments appreciated!.!?
What can I say!?
This was unexpected,
We met by chance,
And something happened!.
At first I almost drove away,
But something was pushing me to stay!.
I turned around, parked my car,
Gave my number to a stranger!.
Now this stranger seems less strange,
And I like him a little more each day!.
We met by chance,
Or so it seems,
But this was really meant to be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
how you put the words into rhythms that are somewhat different, but all-in-all the same is really great!.

and that's really cute, too!.!.!. how you met that kid!.
the best things happen by surprise!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Its very nice I don't think the line "And something happened" fits in very well, and maybe for "I like him a little more each day" you could say "I like him more with each passing day" Keep writing poetry, your very good
Don't click on that guys link, I got stuck on that page :(Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great job, I really enjoyed it!. The rhythm really had me going!.

You should really submit it to http://www!.papertank!.com and see what they think!. I bet you could get a high rating for it on there!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very nice! :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

You go girl! Just do not rush anything!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

how cuuuute!.
i wish i could just write like that!.!.
but i find myself being forced!.
for english class and such!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's really good I enjoyed it!. Keep Writing!. =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

niceWww@QuestionHome@Com