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Question: Can you give me your opinion for my piece "The Opponent"!?
The Opponent

Unyielding emotion bound with indestructible armor,
Amazed, behind a shield, exposed a woman unlike any other!.
Pierced by her opponent's desire to unmask her humility,
The woman proclaimed,

I do not wish to fight you!.
For you are convinced you will surely win!.
Victorious eyes veil your sinful heart!.
Hardened, your soul looks forward to a timely end to an eager start!.

Did challenge fabricate your confidence to battle against love's will!?
Craving a prideful mask, seeking another adversary still!.
Meanwhile, my heart remains tender beneath my breastplate!.
I season your reflection and no longer rapture hate!.

I long to unclothe you, my pretentious opponent and unveil your true identity!.
An impotent man yearning a woman's embrace, scouring for serenity!.

Sheathing her sword, the unlikely opponent to a knight's unlikely heart's duel, exclaimed:
"Your sword in hand, my shield in mine,
not to quarrel but to combine!.
Unbreakable are we, together as one,
until life beholds the last morning sun!"

Dedicated to my loving husband 12 years

This poem reflects a tragedy in my life!. A personal decision had to be made---divorce or stick it out!. I am happy to say I made the right choice!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
IT'S REALLY GOOD IMO!. If I were to criticize I would say that the first stanza does not rhyme but the rest does!. It kinda threw me as I wasn't sure what type of poem I was reading!. The cadence gets really good at the 3rd stanza!. I really like it!.

Best lines:
Did challenge fabricate your confidence to battle against love's will!?
Craving a prideful mask, seeking another adversary still!.
Meanwhile, my heart remains tender beneath my breastplate!.
I season your reflection and no longer rapture hate!.

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"Your sword in hand, my shield in mine,
not to quarrel but to combine!.
Unbreakable are we, together as one,
until life beholds the last morning sun!"

(just one other thing!.!.!. For consistancy you might want to either quote or not quote the second and last stanzas!.)
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That's really sweet that you chose to stick it out!. I was married, I on the hand chose to get divorced!. I cherish my decision!. Marriage is tough and you expressed that well in your poem!. I`m no expert, but I think your poem is excellent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com