Critique My Poem: I Love You in Neon Light

Question: Critique My Poem: I Love You in Neon Light

I would write I love you
In neon lights
I would have it in marquee
In down town
In Vegas or the Chanzalize
I will go to Africa
To the Kilimanjaro mountains
And will have sign
I love you on the top
I love you unconditionally
So you know
I will have the sign
Every place you go
I will have it
Even if I go to
Tibet or mountain Everest
So I love you
And you remember that
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Great poem!. Sentimental!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"and will have sign" is not grammatically correct!. It might sound better with equal syllables every other line!. And it's a bit hard to follow, the last few lines are hard to comprehend!. It's a very sweet idea though, keep working on it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Fantastic ! Www@QuestionHome@Com

SweetWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it!. its sweetWww@QuestionHome@Com