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Question: I need help writing/editing a poem!! Please!
Ok!. so I'm trying to write a poem here!. And I've realized!.!.!.I suck at it!!
I've basically got key ideas written down and then squeezed something in here and there that I thought might rhyme!. Anyways, my point is, it sounds very cheezy, unoriginal, and sloppy!! And I need help making it beautiful!.!.!.!.!. Anyone with poetry talent!? Take a swing at it!.!.!.Toss the words and sentences around and see what you get!. Please!!!


I've lived my whole life knowing that one day I'd find someone
But I never thought I'd feel this way
I've never felt this way before
No one else makes me feel the way you make me feel
I get so happy I could cry

I couldn't figure out why I felt this way
No matter how much I tried to walk away
I knew it would catch up with me someday
I don't really know what stopped me before
But it didn't stop me from coming back for more

Because good things rarely happen to me
And when they do I think they're too good to be true

I knew that one day I would figure this out
And I could never let anything make me doubt
Though this past little while has been a bit rough
And just as I felt I had had enough
I realized the answer was right in front of me
That it was you all along
Why I am what I am
Why I do what I do
Baby I love you

Strange that I never noticed you before
Then one day you're standing outside my door
Heavenly Father really did make you stand out for me
You're everything I ever thought you could me
He's the one that led me to you
And kept leading me to you
It was only then that I realized
It was you all along
Why I am what I am
Why I do what I do
Baby I love you

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Leave your poem as it is!. I think it is beautiful!. People who take your work and move it around make it their poem then, not yours!. Trust me!. I am a published poet and it is a masterpiece of the heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful poem
this poem is about being someone special
there are emotions like I now understand
to realizing that nothing could hold you back
It is about love
because of I love you

The first line I lived my whole life
or I've lived my whole life

I'am so happy I could cry
or
I'm so happy I could cry
I knew it would be one day it would catch
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It's not cheesy at all! The best poems are written from the heart - it's all about the quality of the message!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've lived my whole life knowing that one day,
I'd find someone
But I never thought I'd feel this way
No one else makes me feel the way you make me feel
I get so happy I could cry

I couldn't figure out why I felt this way
No matter how much I wanted to walk away
I knew it would catch up with me someday
I don't really know what stopped me before
But it didn't stop me from coming back for more

Because good things rarely happen to me
And when they do,
I think they're too good to be true

I knew that one day I would figure this out
And I could never let anything make me doubt
Though this past little while has been a bit rough
And just as I felt I had had enough

I realized the answer was right in front of me
That it was you all along
Why I am what I am
Why I do what I do
Baby I love you

Strange that I never noticed you before
Then one day you're standing outside my door
Heavenly Father really did make you stand out for me
You're everything I ever thought you could me
He's the one that led me to you
It was only then that I realized
It was you all along
Why I am what I am
Why I do what I do
Baby I love you



I like this poem alot but I fixed a few gramical errors and repeated sentences like verses:
But I never thought I'd feel this way
and
I've never felt this way before

mean the same thing!. so let me you how that helped you out!.
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