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Question: Can any one help me with this poem!?
ok so i really need help figuring out how to situate it into looking like a poem because im not really sure how!. like how do i put the words in the right place!?


How could you ever deny what we had, the laughs the tears the love the fears!?

The late night talks we had, we were there for each other good and bad!.

I saw your flaws, and you saw mine!. But for us there was no such thing as time!.

I hoped it would always be just us two, an endless love shared between me and you!.

Your sweet words your kind touch, i always thought i didn't deserve so much!.

I tried to be at my best, the girl you want and need, but you were always so hard to read!.

Did you share the love i gave, the love for you i only saved!?

My questions were answered soon enough, i guess you didn't care you were being to tough!.

You took my heart the one i gave no second thoughts no good bys for me to save!.

you walked away no feelings no pain, how can that be how am i sain!?

All the pain that costed me all the tears i shed, every waking moment i began to dred!. those long lonely hours to think and to long, to think of that song we always called our own!.

But for you no emotion your i love yous all fake, you left all our memories for me to take!.

Its gotten hard to miss you the more i think, your not my man any more no more life of pink!.

But even if your not there any more i have something to hold, our old memories , ill always have those!. But im getting older but it all seems unreal , but just like scars they never fully heal !.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is a very touching poem!.

I would write it in lines of 4 but that's just personal taste, here is how I would write it:

How could you ever deny what we had!?
The laughs the tears the love the fears!?
The late night talks we had,
We were there for each other good and bad!.

I saw your flaws, and you saw mine!.
For us there was no such thing as time!.
I hoped it would always be just us two,
An endless love shared between me and you!.

Your sweet words your kind touch,
I always thought I didn't deserve so much!.
I tried to be at my best,
The girl you want and need,

But you were always so hard to read!.
Did you share the love I gave!?
The love for you I only saved!?
My questions were answered soon enough,

I guess you didn't care you were being too tough!.
You took my heart the one I gave
No second thoughts
No good byes for me to save!.

You walked away no feelings no pain,
How can that be how am I sane!?
All the pain that caused me
All the tears I shed,

Every waking moment I began to dread!.
Those long lonely hours to think and to long,
To think of that song we always called our own!.
But for you no emotion

Your love was all fake,
You left all our memories for me to take!.
It’s gotten hard to miss you the more I think,
Your not my man any more no more life of pink!.

But even if your not there any more
I have something to hold, our old memories!.
I’ll always have those!.
But I’m getting older but it all seems unreal,
But just like scars they never fully heal!.

Hope that helps, keep writing!.

Best WishesWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's really set up in a great way, I think that after every 1 or 2 sentences, you begin another paragraph, then it'll look more like a poem!. Great work though, it was honestly very very well written!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

How could you ever deny what we had,
the laughs the tears the love the fears!?

The late night talks we had,
we were there for each other good and bad!.

I saw your flaws, and you saw mine!.
But for us there was no such thing as time!.

I hoped it would always be just us two,
an endless love shared between me and you!.

Your sweet words your kind touch,
i always thought i didn't deserve so much!.

I tried to be at my best, the girl you want and need,
but you were always so hard to read!.

Did you share the love i gave, t
he love for you i only saved!?

My questions were answered soon enough,
i guess you didn't care you were being too tough!.

You took my heart the one i gave no second thoughts no good bys for me to save!.

you walked away no feelings no pain,
how can that be how am i sane!?

All the pain that costed me all the tears i shed,
every waking moment i began to dred!.
those long lonely hours to think and to long,
to think of that song
we always called our own!.

But for you no emotion
your i love yous all fake,
you left all our memories for me to take!.

Its gotten hard to miss you
the more i think,
your not my man any more no more life of pink!.

But even if your not there any more
i have something to hold,
our old memories , ill always have those!.

But im getting older but it all seems unreal ,
but just like scars they never fully heal


I hope this helps, I thought that was a really great poem!. The structure is just basic but set out like this tells the reader how to say it!.
Keep up the p[oetry and forget about him girl!Www@QuestionHome@Com