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Question: What do you think about this poem!? Please I need opinions!.!.!.
If you hate it please tell me why
If you like it please feel free to explain why

I built my house upon the sand
I built my house upon the sand on the beach shore
I couldn’t see ahead to the fate that becomes poor
I couldn’t see the waves crashing down
I put my fate in the hands of the untrustworthy
But I couldn’t see it would be the hands
By which I would drown
I built my house upon the sand
I built my house out of this sand
This pure white sand
The sound of the devils advocates
Whispering in my ear
There is nothing to fear
The ocean is a controllable beast
Upon your house it shall not feast
They were liars
But that I could not see
I was blinded by ignorance
Blinded by what I thought should be
As the water now fills my lungs
My warning to you is
Only this
Do not build house upon the sand
Build it upon the stone
On which generations had stood
Build it upon the stone
That could
Never move
It is your corner stone
It is your only hope
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This desperately needs editing!.!.!.!.for example the poem could begin at line following !.!.!.By which I would drown
and nothing would be missed!.

Another slight carp - even I, a non-religious person, know the tale of the foolish man who built his house upon the sand, and the wise man who built his house upon a rock!.!.!.!.so this isn't very original!.

Sorry for being so harsh, but you did ask for honesty!.
ps - There is a lot to be pleased about in this, it isn't all bad by any means
From I built my house upon the sand ---until----the end - it is fine!.
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