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Question: What do you think of my first ever Septolet Poem!?
Septolet
The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between
the two parts!. Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture!.

Poem!.!.!.!.

Beneath
sunset skies
large Ginger tiger
prowls

Dears
scours through
grazing fields
escaping predators!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It is a very good effort!. The second verse is unclear and has one too many lines!. I think perhaps you did mean "dears", and certainly some other word than "deer"!. Somehow I see a large tabby on the prowl!

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How about!.!.!.!.!.!.!? (please excuse my changes to your good attempt)

Beneath
sunset skies
prowling Ginger tiger
crouches

Deer scour through
grazing fields
escaping predators!.

Does that help!? Just a minor tweak for spelling and line count (with suggestion only to change the description of how the tiger's waiting and maybe replace scour with scatter!. (scour is more looking around, scatter is action of escaping) Just trying to help!. Disregard this if you like!. :-)

Thank you for explaining what a septolet is!. I wasn't sure!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good!. One thing though, if you are talking about deer as in the animal, it's spelled deer and the plural form of the word is deer!. There is no word deers!. Hope it helps!. I really like the poem though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Who cares what a septolet is!.!.!. If a poem is bad it is bad either way it is presented!. I would not bother with the formalities but strive to become a better poet/writer firstWww@QuestionHome@Com

Great work, however the word deer is used as both singular and plural for the animal!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The poem paints a very clear picture!. Others have made some valid suggestions for this form!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

A coupolet is a misspelled word my deer!. While dear graz on gras, peots should pen corectly!. Poeple undersand beter, do'nt u tthink!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

very deep! its beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

The imagery is there!.!.
It's nice!.Try to do another one!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very good,!!! but you have 8 lines!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Na unsa ka dai! na suko ka sa mga tigers!?!!?! Nganu man!.!.!.!.!.!?
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