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Question: What do you think of this rhyming poem about the muse!?
Muse

My muse is amused;
somewhat confused
that I need to sleep,
awakening me several times
with a thought, a rhyme
a word, or a line!.
A steady stream,
night whisperings so clear;
soon I have poetry
coming out my ears!.
The night is so quiet
nothing is obscured,
and tomorrow
the muse will return I’m sure,
so I must learn
to calm
the creative flow,
rest in my head
and let it all go!.


Helpful comments and critiques are of course welcomed!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Okay let's just get this out of the way!. I love:

My muse is amused

and

night whisperings so clear

Those lines sound great!.

Minor bump in L4 (maybe use elision and shorten to 'wakening)

also: Nothing is obscured might sound better as Nothing obscured

Beyond those nits (and those are just my opinion) excellent flow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very inspirational and fluid- I really like it!. Reminds me of Domination of Black by Wallace Stevens; I have just started reading and enjoying his works!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice one, know the feeling!.Www@QuestionHome@Com