Is my poem good? Honesty please...

Question: Is my poem good!? Honesty please!.!.!.

The Premonition

Twilight appears within my mind
A dream they may call it
But I find that more will unwind

An omen to the seer
A desire to the poor
The unknown riddle
That seems somewhat obscure

The fantasy of wealth
Shall rot with the essence of time
The nightmare of decease
As the death rope you will climb

Could it be true!?
These revelations come into sight
I find that pleasant and evil,
Must arrive then ignite

Hindering time will keep me now
I step forward and slow my tread
For I am unaware
Of what may lie ahead

I conceal my fears
I then detect
A miscalculation
If I am correct

The terrors that shock me
Keep me tossing and turning all night
I veil those horrors
Instead I must fight

This sign advised me
To confront what’s there
This one simple dream had saved me
From a lifetime of despair

What do you think!? Please be honest!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It really is a phenomenal poem!. Your word choice is unbelievable!. However, it is a little dark, but I'm pretty sure that was done intentionally, so you achieved your goal! I like the underlying meaning I grasped, and I think it was beautifully written!. Keep writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty good, but I guess nobody else noticed the misspelling!. "The nightmare of decease" It's spelled "disease"!. I think the poem starts out strong but falters a bit in the 6th paragraph!. Miscalculation is not a very poetic word!. Try reading the poem aloud and you'll see that the flow is broken by this word!. Perhaps "misstep" or something similar!. also the phrase "tossing and turning" is a cliche!. Try coming up with your own words for this idea!. Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your poems are so amazing, every one of them! You have an amazing talent! =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I LOVE IT!!!!!!
i really really love it

i just dont like the first stanza
it dosent rhyme
and it makes very little sense

BUT I REALLY REALLY LOVE IT!!!!
i really really do!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I know, deep and serious!.!.!. That Louis guy talks the truth in a comedic way!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's really good!. Well done i like the hidden meaningsWww@QuestionHome@Com

it reminds me of those people who atempt to be deep and serious!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

epic! :3Www@QuestionHome@Com

Way to not try to hard!.
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Quite good you have a very talented gift!

Xx!.Shaiya!.xXWww@QuestionHome@Com

yeah good job;;Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is really good!.!.!.
i personally have to say thats its one of the best i've ever read :]Www@QuestionHome@Com