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Sweet and lovely
The girl from Bronx
Wih Dominican Caramel tan
Walking down the street
with brim black hat
Silky long hair
how lovely
Wearing short skirt
tight and sexy
Showing shapely legs
how beautiful and sexy
Has pink high heels
making her tip top sexy
Drawing jeers and whistles
Oh the girl from the Bronx
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I see her walking down the street and she is sexy, hearing the whistles and jeers, ---yes the picture has been painted with your words and well done at that!!Cheers!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.!.!.maybe you show write some more trying to use more literary devices like simile,metaphora,alliteration,anaphora, and more!.!.those usually help Www@QuestionHome@Com

You are going to be famous one day soon!. I feel it in my dominican bones!.lolWww@QuestionHome@Com