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Question: What do you think of this poem i wrote!.!.!. and why!?
Give me a poem

Give me a poem
Please make it short
Throw in big words that confuse
Riddles and lines into the pot
Chiselled, moulded, thought

I want a poem, what do you say!?
Deep like the abyss
With visions and ideas
That upsets as well as soothes
Lies and tells the truth

Show me a poem in veil like a Muslim
I’ll show you one that knows not religion
But shades of bright red slurp
To provoke, invoke
Endorse as well as reject

I want a poem most of all
Marrying my wares to my woes
When I’m happy or sad that knows
Each line deep more than the last
More wisp, built yet to last

By Dee
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it! And don't listen to the people who tell you it should rhyme more!. When you add too many rhymes, it makes the poem sound cheesy, annoying, and immature!. I like it just the way it is!. Great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dee,
I see by your poem
you will accept anything
The poem is wanting some challenge
because it says throw in some big words
that confuse!.
I don't know if I can guarantee confusion
Parade Poem:
This morning I went to a parade
watching it was unique
there were lots of floats
My attempt to take pictures
I will have to wait to get them developed
there were lots of dignitaries
on horses
Radio stations police



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i liked it it was very deep but it did get a little confusing plz read mine tho i would love to hear what you have to say


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Interesting and varied enough!. I would encourage you to keep writing!. "Shades of bright red slurp"!?!? lol lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Great lyrics, it would be better if they rhymed, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty- i like it
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i like the last verse alot!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think its good, i'd like it better if it rhymed though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com