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ONE DOOR

i open one door
another comes in my
way
so many paths that lead to
my future
but no path is the same

do i turn left or do
i turn right!?
is this wrong or is this right
if i lean on one person
will it be ture
or if they lean on me
wat should i do or will i be a star or will i live large or will i be so poor i live in my car

i want to know what will happen before it
will happen
i want to live the american dream
i want to live like a king!
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That was great, cheerchick! By reading your poem, readers understand you're pretty ambitious!. Haha!.

I appreciate how you are showing a little mystery and confusion in your poem!. You express your feelings of being puzzled!.

My advice is that you change some of your lines, especially the ones in the last paragraph!. Your topic seems to wander from it's mood!. You should change that!.

Good job! =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Figure out a way to make this line shorter:
wat should i do or will i be a star or will i live large or will i be so poor i live in my car

Spell check your poem!.!.!.!.a few typos here!.

every place you use the word "i" is not capitalized!. are you saying you aren't important!?

in the last line, I would capitalize 'I" want to live like a king!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i liked it,very good!. =)





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its great but i would change king to queen

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It's like a dickinson without the dashes =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

8!.5/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's pretty good!.!.!.!.!.7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

NICE! :D


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Cliche' but in saying that I still liked reading it!.!.!.one and a bit thumbs!Www@QuestionHome@Com

7 out of ten it was !.!.!.goodish!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's greatWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is good!. Tell me what you rate my rhyme


I'm a Young Money Millionaire
Tougher than Nigerian hair
My criteria compared to your career
Just isn't fair
I'm a venereal disease
Like a menstrual bleed
Threw the pencil it leak
On the sheet of the tablet in my mind
Cause I don't write ****
Cause I ain't got time
Cause my seconds, minutes, hours
Go to the almighty dollar
And the almighty power
Of dat chit cha cha chopper
Sister, Brother, Son, Daughter
Father muthaf**ka copper
Got da maserati dancin
On the bridge ***** poppin
Tell the coppers
Hahaha you can't catch Em
You can't stop Em
I go by them goon rules
If you can't beat Em
Then you bop Em
You can't man Em
Then you mop Em
You can't stand Em
Then you drop Em
You pop Em
Cause we pop Em
Like Orville Redenbacher
Muthaf**ka I'm Ill
Yeah
A Million here
A Million there
Sicilian ***** with long hair
With coke in her derriere
Like smokin the thinest air
I open the Lamborghini
Hopin them crackers see me
Like look at that bastard Weezy
He's a beast
He's a dog
He's a muthaf**kin' problem
Ok your a goon
But what's a goon to a goblin
Nothin' nothin' you ain't scarin' nothin'
On some ****** bullshit
Call em Dennis Rodman
Call me what you want *****
Call me on my Sidekick
Never answer when it's private
Damn I hate a shy *****
Don't u hate a shy *****
Yeah I ate a shy *****
She ain't shy no more
She changed her name to My *****
Yea ***** that's my *****
So when she ask for the Money
When you through
Don't be surprised *****
And it ain't trickin if u got it
But u like a ***** with no ***
You ain't got ****
Muthaf**ka I'm Ill, not sick
And I'm ok but my watch sick
Yea my drop sick
Yea my glock sick
And my knot thick
I'm it
Muthaf**ka I'm Ill!.!.!.
They say I'm rappin like BIG
Jay
And Tupac
Andre 3000
Where is Erykah Badu at
Who that
Who that said they gon beat Lil Wayne
My name ain't Bic
But I keep dat flame man
Who that one that do that boy
Ya knew that, chew dat, Swallow
And I be the ****
Now u got loose bowels
I don't owe you like two vowels
But I would like for u to pay me by the hour
And I'd rather be pushin flowers
Then to be in the penn sharin' showers
Tony told us this world was ours
And the bible told us every girl was sour
Don't play in her garden
And don't smell her flower
Call me Mr!. Carter or Mr!. Lawn Mower
Boy I got so many bitches
Like I'm Mike Lowry
Even Gwen Stefani
Said she couldn't doubt me
Muthaf**ka I say life
Ain't **** without me
Chrome lips pokin out
The coupe like it's poutin
I do what I do and u do
What u can do about it
***** I can turn a crack rock
Into a mountian
Dare me
Don't u compare me
Cause there ain't nobody near me
They don't see but they hear me
They don't feel me but they fear me
I'm Illi
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