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Whatcha think of this poem I wrote!?

"Broken Heart"
You promised me we'd always be together
But you were in-love with another
You told me loved me and you were mine
You lied and now everythings not fine

I looked at the photo of us on my chair
I started to cry I couldn't help but stare
into your lying eyes, your unfaithful soul
I can't believe you've become so low

I throw the picture into my mirror
it shatters apart
just like my broken heart

I look at the pieces all over the floor
I know I couldn't of took much more
So I'm glad we're through
but I still can't get over the fact I trusted you

I throw the picture into my mirror
it shatters apart
just like my broken heart

I thought we would happily ever after
but now it's time to close this chapter

Whatcha think!?
I luv the ending its perfect I think, wbu!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I do like the ending, but some parts in the middle seem kinda forced and it doesn't flow well!. Overall, it is a good poem!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

aww i loved it Www@QuestionHome@Com