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Question: Are you caught in the trap!?
Another older poem, close to my heart
Mousetrap
It’s too late for you now
Do you hear that!?
It’s the snap of the metal
Of the mousetrap
You’re stuck in it now
Can you feel that!?
The pain is digging deep
From the mouse trap
Look around, all around
Can you see that!?
Everyone left you behind
In the mousetrap
Such a pathetic situation
Can you taste that!?
Bitterness self-inflicted
In the mousetrap
Time has passed you by
Can you smell that!?
The scent of your dying flesh
In the mousetrap
Escape from this hell
Do you think that!?
Forever you will stay
In your mousetrap
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This could be speaking to someone else, but I see it as the first steps
towards self knowlege as well!. The realization that we must evolve and grow or face the consequenses!. This is a very interesting poem, and thanks for posting it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This poem starts out with tremendous impact and then becomes more philosophical!.!.!.I love it!.I love the way the questions in the second line of each stanza use all of the senses!. It gives your poem such depth!. I also love how this works on more than one level, depending on whether you are talking to a specific person, or yourself or whether the reader is intended to ask these questions personally!. Thank you!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
This poem made me think of my ex-husband!. He has a drug habit, so to me he is this mouse in the mousetrap, smelling his own rotten flesh; and guess what, I don`t feel sorry for him!.
He could just stay in his mouse trap because I am tired of trying to save him!
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Please don't alter this one!. It was written great!. I LOVED IT!!.
I know it's horrible but I just can't wipe the smile of my face!. It actually made me laugh!
LOVED IT, LOVED IT, LOVED IT!!!!!!!!
WELL DONE!
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Raw, graphic and in your face!. Obviously to someone who was once close!. Probably cathartic for you!. To me though, I would suggest more subtlety in development, but that is just me!. Www@QuestionHome@Com
that's kinda raunchy if you do the right thing with itWww@QuestionHome@Com