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Question: Why is it so dark this morning!?
Woke up this morning
The sky was dark and cold
"That's Strange!" I thought,
"Thaere's something here not told!."

I walked into the garden
A chill lay on the ground
Birds in bushes, silent
My breath the only sound!.

So, I fired up my spaceship,
Packed a picnic lunch,
Pointed myself skywards,
I was following a hunch!.

I passed the signs for Venus
Mercury as well,
The place where I was heading
Should be as hot as hell!.

I pulled up where the sun should be,
But I knew it would be missing!.
For there instead a swinging sign
That simply said "Gone Fission!."Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That was lovely!. I am very peed off right now with the people dissing this poem, I know why they don't like it!. THEY THINK IT ISN'T "DEEP" ENOUGH, OR "DEPRESSING" ENOUGH FOR THEM!! CAN'T THEY JUST READ THIS LOVELY POEM AND ACCEPT THAT SOME POEMS CAN BE FUN!!! AAARRGH!!
ok, now that's off my chest, i'd like to say this is very nice poem and has a clever beat that is almost musical!! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

I knew when I read your first posting (well, the first posting of yours I read) that here was going to be some-one worth reading!.!.!.!.and so far you've not proved me wrong!.

I reads so naturally, the story-line fills you will anti-ci-pation, and the punch-line is clever!. Love it, love it, love it!. More please!.

ps -what is thaere's!?
(what's going on!? - this page looks different - and a helpful little rubbered pencil is telling me I've got 3 misspellings - how dare it! (it doesn't like my anticipation)Www@QuestionHome@Com

lol that was so funny! what an awesome poem!
It read really well and didn't miss a beat, I love the punch line!.
I expected your poem to be melancholic and sad from header you used but when you said "spaceship" that put a new twist on it=)
Very awesome poem(made me laugh=)
10/10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

So, if you wanted people to comment on your poem, why didn't you just ask "Hey, what do you think of my poem!?"Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is so dark this morning becase the sun might had not be their or it can be full solar eclipse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

well you're definitely not ever gonna go hungry!.!.bring that poem to a stand up poetry place and your bound to have lots of it thrown atchya!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Use a pun, go to jail!. That's the law!.

lol, that was fun to readWww@QuestionHome@Com

The Harold Ensley of Mars!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very interesting!. and good job!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hahahaha! That's a good one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

because the sun isn't out yet!.!.!.!.maybe!.!.!.lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Ummm!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ok thanksWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!.!.
(thats all i have to say!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i thought this was really cute!. i enjoyed reading it very much!.!.!.last line rocks!Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice peom, i like it!.!.!.!.!.!.i wish i could write poems :(Www@QuestionHome@Com