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Question: Infundibulum!? Your thoughts and comments are appreciated!.!.!.!?
A sad thought filled my heart tonight
Beneath the stars magnificent
That He who turn'd the compass might
Decide my time has near been spent,
That I should spread my wings in flight
And fly home for a part rehearsed
With shining host of heaven sent
And come to be in One immersed!.
It's said that all things in His sight
That writhe in earthly chains are pent
Through brotherhood in anguished plight
And now I know what they have meant!.
The Valley Spirit gives delight
To creatures broken, bowed or cursed
As woodbine twines on trellis bent
And comes to be in One immersed!.
Before I flee this old world's light
And of my mortal sins repent
To be judged by Anubis might
My soul kneel 'neath the firmament
That this unarmored, questing knight
Might grasp the Grail and slake his thirst,
Lay down the sword, set free the kite
And come to be in One immersed!.
I know not where my sadness went
In umber reckoning finely versed
By evensong's magnolia scent
I've come to be in One, immersed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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Your poems deserve to be published!. Oh my, they are so inspiring!. Thank you for sharing with us the offspring of your priceless talent!.
With best regards,
LullehWww@QuestionHome@Com
that's really good!. kinda big words for me but it really works!. almost like a song or something special like that!.!. like something you'd hear more than once!.!. not just read once!.!. it has that kind of thing to it!.!. quality maby of something that can be played and played like a songWww@QuestionHome@Com
Beautifully done i am hoping one day I may write like this, my compliments to you!! Cheers!
I am no where near where you are in poetry but if you see a post that I occasionally post would appreciate your helpful feed back on it! This was a very classy piece of poetry!Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that was really good!
its about death right!? or dying
i like it tho some of the words i dont understand
really deep!.
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keep writing youv rele got a talentWww@QuestionHome@Com
The experiences of the true mystic, wherever they may be, are the same!. But I haven't seen it expressed this eloquently!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Great poem dude well sorta eh not really!. It compares to some of the stuff people write on the walls of public restrooms with call 1800 steve for a good time beside it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Keep posting; I need a larger selection!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Form is perfect; you know that!. The thought is transmitted whole; you know that!. Phrasing is clever, the lexicon rich, the figures brilliant; you know that!.
If you MUST have a quibble, I can supply that I don't much like the slight spiritual ambiguity that comes of mixing Christian, Egyptian, animist, [and some Eastern belief system's!?] names and symbols!. I also find the implicit claim of nobility (knight, sword, kite, [implied Quest--not a commoner's prerogative]) mildly off-putting!. But, as quibbles go, these are pretty damned feeble!.
I had the impression that this was something from a 19th century poet--so I googled a few of the phrases, just for the heck of it!. Bupkes, ergo, this is your work!. If you meant to mock a style, you nailed it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com