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Question: Please read my Short Poem!.!.!. ( =!?
I have just started writign poems, i'm 15!. Do you like my poem!?
Eyes squinting in the light,
The thought of you, helps me fight,
Close to death, Can go fast and slow,
Will I survive, only time will know,
Bodies all around me, deep in thought,
Waiting for a miracle, looking distraught,
A Doctor with a tool, nearing my chest,
I’m going to win, must hope for the best
Awaking to the sounds, the voices I know,
I open my eyes, I sit up nice and slow,
I’m getting better, Spirits arise with relief,
Huddling around, there is everything but grief!.
(it is not based on a true story, i just made it up)Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That is such a good poem!.
It is deeply profound
are you a professional or an amateur writer!? Becoz if your only an amatuer, I would honestly suggest you taking this art form further!.
It is really good and a pleasure to read!. Thank you
:)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i think you have done a great job but would suggest you write about issues that you can relate to or have experienced as that is what will attach the emotion to your poem and the reader will relateWww@QuestionHome@Com
i think it wass great
if i was to rate it from 0 thru 10 id
give you like a 9283474675654673433345
haha i really enjoyed reading it!.
Great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
triffic
heres one
you break my heart and u think its a game
your a bit young so u think "huh" your a pain
maybe i should of known u when you were older
and u wouldn't be so flippant
and jelous!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Beautiful :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
WOW, THAT WAS GOOD!. i wish i had that gift!. may God bless you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
verry good
applaud
clap clap clapWww@QuestionHome@Com
thats really good for a 15 year oldWww@QuestionHome@Com
i like it!. its sum what on the deep side!. good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thats great!Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow i am lost 4 words
that is wow
if u hadnt out that u were and amutur i would have never gest
keep goinWww@QuestionHome@Com
you been drinkin!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow, very good for a 15 year old, keep up the good workWww@QuestionHome@Com