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Question: Criticism!? I made a Poem would like advice!. Novice!.!?
I couldn't sleep so i started thinking about all the people in my life (Don't ask me why) and who (could) be the constant in my life besides my family!. I was more or less thinking about my girlfriend and what it would feel like to be married!.

I knew when you came
Thru Hell and Shame
Or Heaven and Fame
Your name
Will alway stay the sameWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
If you are thinking and writing about someone specific, such as your girlfriend, why use such a wide-ranging image of "hell and shame or heaven and fame"!? From where HAS she come!? Don't consider it finished; keep writing to share your heart about her!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you're going to write poetry you should spell every word completely!. It's through!.

It's very plain and evokes no emotion!. Poetry should not only connect to you, but the reader as well!. You might want to keep these to yourself!. It's cute that it rhymes and all, but it's not really poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

so u eneded up writing that how romantic LOLWww@QuestionHome@Com

um!.!.!. i would reword it in a few spotsWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's okay :)
not my fave but it's not rly my style!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com