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I've been fighting a war in side my own head,
It's been killing me, yeah been making me feel dead!.
So I wrote down a sonnet that bleed with falseness,
And I've been using up all the ink in my pens!.

I've had a feeling thats been growing in my chest,
It's pounding on my ribs so I'll leave out the rest,
A girl with a smile, well she once said to me,
"Who the **** are you trying to be"

I woke up confused in my mother's womb,
It was cold outside I didn't know what to do!.
Well honey it takes one to know one and you have it bad,
I've been searching in the dark for what I used to have!.

I've been looking in the mirror and seeing my best friends,
I don't know how to put this but I think it is the end,
Like a curretn of thoughts I have nothing to say,
So I'll pass the time while I write away the day!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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