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Question: Have you felt invisible!?
Invisible
by C!.S!. Scotkin

Invisible one
destined to be
crux
of sorrow
loss
misery
from your
beginning!.

No fault
of yours!.
You were
an Innocent
from first
to last!.
You were
never
invisible
to me!.

No fault
of ours!.
No power
this side
of heaven
could right
nature’s
wrong!.
Numb anger
and tears
hid you!.

You remain
just outside,
peripheral
sweet
glimpse,
that might
have been!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm puzzled by this one!. Part of me wonders if it refers to Christ - but, he wasn't invisible (invincible, but not invisible!.!.!.!.sorry, my little joke)
But, then lots of this poem don't fit this!.!.!.so to whom are you referring!? Is it some fellow human being, a nonentity who is ignored!?
Intriguing - lots to ponder on here!.
As an exercise have you tried rearranging your choice of line lengths!? I was told by some-one helping me in my early creative days that in order to get my reader(s) to hone in on certain words or phrases I should isolate them within my poem!.

E!.g -
Invisible one
destined to be
crux of sorrow
loss
misery
from your beginning!.

Not a great change, but it does give signicance with in the verse!.!.!.!.just a thought!.
Well done with this!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow,
love your
format,
reminiscent
of some
of my
earlier
things!.

Okay, okay, I'll write straight!. No, this actually was beautiful, and enigmatic, with the title suiting it perfectly!. And while you know invisibility is the subject, there is also your subject within the subject, the person who is invisible!. Your last stanza is absolutely amazing, capturing and conjuring!. Thank you for your beauty and your brilliance!.!.!.and your visibility!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

When Nature goes wrong, suffering ensues!. You have made a very powerful statement here, expressed in real poetry!. I find myself feeling visceral sorrow, pain for the one who "might have been" and for those who knew the "invisible" one!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

At the reading of your poem
Some appear visibly moved
Lots of stars were given
99% have said "approved"
Great vision you have shown here
It's remarkable you write
Of something unseen at present
That is so!.!.!.!.!.!.man, outtasight!

I find this poem enigmatic (co-sign Grannnyjill), but it flowed!. The later revision has improved my understanding!.

Reading it with Bob M 's glasses is interesting!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a powerful poem to ponder and savor!. It struck a deep chord in my soul, as I have always felt myself to be invisible-unseen and alone!. This reads very smoothly, yet I read it slowly, wanting to contemplate each well-chosen word!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

He is not invisible to me too, siss!.Well put!.U 'v described the CRUX of our ordeal in a SWEET GLIMPSE!. Never mind the rhyming & the poem structure, I like the flow of thoughts daring to deal w/ such intrecate topic!.A star is earned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is beautiful structured both physically and spiritually!. The physical structure of poem itself stands for the alienism of the mood!. Well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a miscarriage, there is no doubt in my mind; and how beautifully you did in describing the loss with such tenderness!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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PHENOMENAL!.!.!.!.!.and you know whyWww@QuestionHome@Com

Now why do you write these things that make me pause and reread and reread! lol I think I get it, so I am leaving it at that, except to say!.!.!.well done!Www@QuestionHome@Com