Does this make sense? I asked yesterday, but removed it due to the phrasing of m

Question: Does this make sense!? I asked yesterday, but removed it due to the phrasing of my question!.!?

Drip,
Drip,
The dull drool
That drowns out the day!.
A dacapo of the dampness
That dances
Like a dart
To the dale of decay!.

Lich,
Lich,
Lifeless limb
Lackadaisically lies!.
A lachrymose of the languid
That laughs
Darting loose
To the lake’s Lorelei!.

(This was a practice in alliteration; I just wanted to try and capture a mood merely with sound but it does have a theme!. Your thoughts please!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

What a wonderful game of sounds!! Thank you so much for making me so delighted! I am reading it so loud!.!.!.and the 'd' and 'L' are having fun in my tongue!. Really beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Fun to read!. I like poetry that engages the senses, and since poems are songs waiting to be set to music, this one engages the sense of sound (alliteration unintentional here, but see, it's contagious)!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great use of alliteration that is definitely fun to read, but paints an extremely dark image!. Great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Silly light hearted sense, yes!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you perfected!. Fun to read out loud!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like reading it out loud!.!.!.great choice in letters!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com