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Question: RATE THIS PLZ!!!!! and also do u hav any title ideas!?
through my eyes the world is dim
for no reason at all
the good i see is almost gone
for it has grown so small

but yet i have no reason
for the lack of good i see
my eyes just have no wanting
for happiness and glee

and so the good of the world
stays blinded from my eyes
all i see is sadness
all greed and all despise

but then i saw a set of sight
whoes loved and lost but is still to live
a tragic accident creates a tourchered soul
but still he has so much to give

the good he sees with in every day
and the good he passes on
so how within my virgin eyes
could all the good be gone!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it as it is very deep!. Sometimes you have to wonder where the good in this world is!. Especially after watching the news and reading the paper!. But there is hope and you depicted that well!.

Titles
What mine eyes have seen
Good
Through the eyes of a innocent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is actually a very good poem! i would give it a 9/10 its the best one i've read on this site all day!. I would just change the 4th stanza a little but you completely nailed the first 3!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is an amazing poem!. title wise!? maybe just call it!. "Unperfect Title"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

VERY GOOD I LIKE IT!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I've seen this on the internet!. Do you have it published somewhere else, or did you steal it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com