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Question: Critique My Poem: Viola Love Treasure!?
Viola is hungry for love
For sensuous pleasure
When her body shivers
With Joy and ecstasy
When lover have her treasure
Viola is master piece
Of quiet beast
She can devour her lover
Drain him from last drop of power
Viola you have to watch
With Her green eyes
With her ivory figure
Viola is a temple
For worship
To ascend heavenWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Hmmm, interesting stuff!. There are alot of images that you have here, try going back to them, and try to make it so that you grab the reader more!. The part that i liked, was the one were you mentione Viola a masterpiece, try going back and adding more feeling to these images!. This poem was good though, could use some work, like any other poem, but overall a good piece!. I read like 5 times already, and im trying to figure out what you are talking about!. Thats not a problem, but still, there something there that i know im missing!. I hope to see this poem posted here again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com