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Question: And does "neon" glow!?
“Neon’s” Glow
They approach, drawn to neon’s glow
marveling at the light, the colors,
the intensity!.
Curiosity causes a hand to reach
to touch the light, the glow,
candied fruit one must have!.
And just like that it is broken!.
The light, the glow, the colors gone
just shattered glass, buzzing, broken!.
The hand retreats from cookie jar
quickly moving, escaping!.
Neon man is called, restores the glow
gives light once again, illuminates!.
How easy glass can be repaired by hands!.
How sadly lives cant…Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You give light daily in your poetry!. One suggestion, perhaps you would consider changing the last word to "cannot!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
"Hi!",
You certainly do honey! : )
'Oh, the poem, 'yes!' : )
yeah, so true, beautiful poem expressed well!. I wished at times I could bring loved ones back and never say goodbye!. It is sad that life is so short lived!. If it isn't the mortal body that dies, It's the soul(emotion within one self) from sadness, grief and portrayal!.
you did a good job on this poem!.
WELL DONE!
Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com
As always a wonderful piece,Neon!. I agree with those suggesting cannot as the last word!. Cant, at least as I understand it, is "the characteristic or secret language of a particular group"* from the Latin word "cantus" to sing!.
*from "the Online Dictionary"Www@QuestionHome@Com
i am humble enough to say i need help and my help seems to come with a slap in the face but i am confident in my Lord is the saviour!.!.!.!.so if you will just follow in my next prayer we can have some fun that so many people seem to want to have at others expenseWww@QuestionHome@Com
AWW I LOVE IT! I told you before in a private email that Neonman is a perfect name for you, and you proved it 100% with this poem!.
It`s ironic how your business, your name, and poetry all have light! You are blessed!. Do you know it!?
Thanks for illuminating Y!A poetry section!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
being who i am, i am drawn to warm glowing things!.!.!.i loved loved loved this poem!. and heres my thought!.!.!.if lives could be repaired by hands, then poetry may never be written!. thank you for your words!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Thinking, thinking, huh!. I think on Las Va/gas!.
and question, some life's can be repaired, not all but some!.
and not always easily done, yet they can be!.
"The healing touch"Www@QuestionHome@Com
That was a great poem Neon! The ending is just brilliant!. And I agree with Elaine's suggestion!. 'cannot' will give a soft ending than 'can't'!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
My immediate impression!.!.!.Cannot!.
Otherwise, excellent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Once again you have brought forth light!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Cannot hold a candle to you Neonman, most Illuminating!.
My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really like this!. I am also with E P regarding the last line!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yes, Neon and Neonman glows daily!. A bright good morning to you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com