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Question: Good poem/song for my gf!?!? Thanks!!?
So many dreams of you and me
Painting a picture of something to see
The ship of my heart sails the darkest seas
Your eye that always glances but never sees
Oh, walk me down the path again
Avoid the path that leads to pain
I will love you forever more
But until that day, my lost soul is still at war!.
Let me tell you El, it's been to long,
Since I've had the time to sing along!.
Let me tell you that it's just begun,
The war inside that can't be won!.
So many times I've had to be,
The hanging photo that you can't see
You love to look but you never touch,
My heart is losing it's own self control!.
As the ship set it's sails north,
I will let it go out my back door!.
And I will walk the only path i know,
And I hope it doesn't cross your road!.
So I'll sail the ocean to find myself,
Not caring about what we call health!.
I long to be the only one for you,
But until then I don't know what to do!.
I love the look on your face,
It spells, 'I've always loved you'!.
THANKS!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
That`s really nice that you wrote her a song!. You have a romantic side!. She is very lucky to have you!. I hope she loves it!
TIP: Shouldn`t you have chorus!.
Maybe this should be the chorus!.
"Let me tell you El, it's been to long,
Since I've had the time to sing along!.
Let me tell you that it's just begun,
The war inside that can't be won!."Www@QuestionHome@Com
awesome dude, two thumbs way up!. I bet she will love it!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
BEST POEM EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!
i love it!. she'll love it dude if you wrote that teach me your ways if you didnt its still great and you haave great choice in poetry!.
mine always seem to come out kinda dark see
Beneath the shadows in the dead of night,
There is a place where dreams arent always right,
Beside the echoes are thoughts to tear,
Inside these thoughts lie her heart breaking stare,
Striking while your down and out,
Knowing that you'll never doubt,
Her love for you was truly real,
The shock in your eyes is hers to steal,
As your life borders to the start of its end,
She realizes now theres no need to pretend,
One last breath before she strikes again,
silent screams, she cannot explain!.
Anything left is yours to keep,
Nothing but the sound of eternal sleep,
Now she has got what she forever wanted,
No longer is he permanently haunted,
anyways i wish i could write like that and that poem i can relate to alot so it makes it even better for me i love it XD your awesome thats the last thing im going to say !.!.!.!.!.!.!.bye ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com