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Question: New poem, Wat do u think!?
When Time Stops

By: Rockstar123

As I walk the floor crunches beneath me
something moves in the distance
as I go closer my heart beats like a loud, lonely drum
What I see is impossible but I want to believe
It is bright, blinding but kind and gentle
its vibrant eyes stare
I am standing, frozen unable to move
It looks at me smiling maybe
then its gone
It was a beautiful creature, innocent and wonderous
As I look around everything is still, like time itself has stopped
I whisper, " Peace, for once in this harsh, harsh world I see true and honest peace"
then I walk off my mind clear and my heart open

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
-Blinks a few times-

Honestly, I think this is quite good!. The feeling it gives you is spiritual, or holy!.

"It is bright, blinding but kind and gentle!."

I like that line!.

The only thing I could suggest is to use a few less describing words!. But otherwise, wonderful!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this poem!. It makes me want to stop and take in this beautiful event!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com