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By C!.S!. Scotkin Wrapped in their insanity backward eyes no longer see, shiv’ring cold the child stands locked from love, she has no key!. Crushing burden upon her so much for this little child takes away her innocence almost kills her spirit, mild!. Still, she tries and still she grows!. rises over screams and hate in the gloom we see her bloom!. leave that garden, shut the gate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Now you've gone and done it!. You have accomplished what few are able to do!. You have opened the tear ducts of my soul!. A child in a loveless home has got to be one of the saddest things in our universe!. Thank you for this heart rending tale which even in the face of such adversity ends on a successful note!. We can only hope the lack of love doesn't hinder her ability to love!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Great ending! I was just about to get upset before that last stanza!. A good story has: a character, something happening to that character, and that character changing due to something happening!. Good job!. The second stanza is the only one I think maybe needs a revision, but I don't how to offer any help with it at the moment; it just doesn't have as powerful of a force as one and three (in my opinion)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Neglect and abuse of children is a world-wide problem!. Your poetry illustrates that children can rise above their past and live as normal, even exceptional human beings as adults!. The poem itself is very well done!. You have grown immensely as a poet in a very short time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Whoever this poem is about I have to congratulate them, life isn't easy, it's full of pain, truth, honesty and their are people that can hurt!. You have done extremley well, congratulations!. It's awesome!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com To follow the story was easy!. Each line and stanza was important to tell the story leading to the growth, overcoming, and the eventual leaving behind!. Great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Powerful piece!. I didn't quite understand "almost kills her spirit, mild!?" Loved "backward eyes", that is great imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com This was beautifully written , I liked the ending and hopefully the outcome was good!That was the way I wanted to perceive this poem! She grew up and in spite of all had a positive outlook on life!! I like happy endings!! CheersWww@QuestionHome@Com I can relate to this poem!. Too many sad childhoods in this world!. You've captured a rough childhood and, thankfully, a successful outcome!. Well said!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Heart breaking poem!.!.!.beautifully rendered!. It's nice to see that the child managed to grow and over come her plight!. It provides hope where so many find none!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Powerful poem!. I lived it, fortunately not to the extreme that many children do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com "Hi!", Beautifully written!. She gets to smell the flowers beyond the rusted gates!. WELL DONE! Cheers : )Www@QuestionHome@Com I really like it!. I write poetry 2!.Www@QuestionHome@Com you know what!? you are amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com |