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Question: Critique my new poem!? please and thank you!.!?
"little bird"

birdie, little bird!.
have you no home!?
sitting in the grass all alone!.

birdie, little bird!.
sing for your friends!
song should be our end!.

birdie, little bird!.
chirp pretty for me!.
it's dark and i won't see!.

birdie, little bird!.
please sing that song,
because i can't stay long!.

chirp, little bird,
or sing,
or whistle,
or call,
for me,
Birdie, little birdWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
first verse, OK!.
second verse, third line, words missing!?
third verse, don't get third line
forth verse, should be second verse
fifth verse, i get the feeling little bird has to entertain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

what was your point!? what does the bird represent!? personally not my taste (though my favorite poet is Edgar Allen Poe) but for little kid i guess it is cute!. Good rhythm but still what is the meaningWww@QuestionHome@Com

awwwwww!.!.!.!.thats soo cute!!! I think this poem is ok from a scale 1-10 I give you a 7! I think you should add more to this poem, seems like it needs more words!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

The first four stanzas are cute!. But the last one seems a bit random (in its structure, that is)!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's pretty good compared to alot of crapy poems I,ve read!.good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it's cute!. [:Www@QuestionHome@Com

cute for an under 12 yo - how old are you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com