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Question: New poem!! criticism is needed! THNX!?
ARMAGEDDON SLAVES

I saw the world relinquish in its pain on Armageddon day!.
Is that your way of making us pay!?
The skies darkened, what an awful place!.
Look in the mirror, it's never the same face!.
I'll watch you drown in your crypto - god's misery,
before I can give in to your totalitarian bitchery!.

Your ignorance is put to rest,
and burying this disease is such a bless!.
Nothings what it seems!.
Takes a righteous god,
to create and evil odd!.

A sea of sudden fog,
we play like wild hogs!.
A reich of christian laws,
put in rest, in exile's solid jaws!.
Big man on cross,
was never my f**ckn' loss!.

Sheep bow down and plead,
your manic disciple queens tease!.
You take there f**king dirt,
and yet you people still revert!.
The crucifix was just your fix,
to cover your stigmata six!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
WOW i absolutely love this poem!!!!!!!!!!!
im serious!.!.!.!.i really like it, i'm also a tiny bit relgious disliking, so i like this even more!. and it doesnt sound too dr!.suess, either!. it has all the right rhymes in all the right places!!! great use of words btw! ^_^Www@QuestionHome@Com

Plenty of emotion, needs some editing/correction and a little clarification in places!. Shows promise!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a pretty good poem!. I quite enjoyed it!. You have quite the talent in my oppinon!. ^-^Www@QuestionHome@Com