Once a familiar face
Now intertwined in the crowd
Faith is forever gone
What is now found!?
Loneliness is my home, my sun and my moon
It is all i know
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Now intertwined in the crowd Faith is forever gone What is now found!? Loneliness is my home, my sun and my moon It is all i know Since the loss of youWww@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It is a good one!. The emotions of sadness and loneliness are evident!. Having lost a few people this year that I love and care for, this poem strikes home for me!. Keep up the good work and always write from your heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Did you write it!? If so, I think it's good!.!.!. I like how you don't worry about the rhyming so much!. It's really the flow that's important!. I think it's a nice beginning!. If you worked with it more, it could become something very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The Poem is fine, and I dont think ur a professional poet so you shouldnt compare yourself to pro's!.!.!. but here's a poem by Gwendolyn Brooks, I personally hate it, but you can form your own opinions We Real Cool - by G!. Brooks THE POOL PLAYERS!. SEVEN AT THE GOLDEN SHOVEL!. We real cool!. We Left school!. We Lurk late!. We Strike straight!. We Sing sin!. We Thin gin!. We Jazz June!. We Die soon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Sad :( Please comment on my new poems! http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!. http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I'd agree with the first answer, about siz out of ten!. Well, it certainly doesn't suck, it's kind of cool!. It isn't like WOE, that's so DEEP!.but that isn't bad at all, it's nice and flows well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Now intertwined in crowds Since loosing you i would do it like that but i love it!!Www@QuestionHome@Com i wouldn't say it sux but i wasn'e like omg this is the greatest thing ive ever read but poetry is a very personal thing and i think it is hard for people to judge itWww@QuestionHome@Com That's very profound and sappy like a maple tree tap putting out it's delicious love syrup!.!.!. FOR MY PANCAKES!Www@QuestionHome@Com 6 or 7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com I think you have a sense where your going with this!. I only suggest to make it more longer!. Best of Luck!!Www@QuestionHome@Com yea u should work on the end of it and i know that rhyming aint a big thing but u should work on that too!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com kinda odd!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Sounds kinda cheesy, but its well written!.Www@QuestionHome@Com XD This is awesome! good work :D like pixel art!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com nice!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |