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Question: Do you like sundrops with raindrops!? (Poetic kissing for the one your missing!.)!?
"Thirst"

sunlight arriving
with a spring breeze,
sundrops rising
as if to please

exposed petals
anticipating
open desiring
are awaiting

crystaline warm
falling raindrops
flowing waters
crawl over sundrops

Trains a whistling
sounding its time
my girls arriving
I wait in line

silk dress swirling
open eyes glisten
pretty young girl
I've been missing

first sight of her
feet leave the ground,
world is spinning
around 'n round,

I stop breathing
it takes me down
she's whispering
passionate sounds

Wanting, desiring
I start touching
tasting exploring
my hearts singing

Like the sundrops
drinking raindrops
my love for her
it never stops!.

note : Sundrops are perennials that blossom in the late spring and early summer in northern climates!. They require little care and provide a wonderful display of bright yellow flowers!. Although they are similar to the Evening Primrose, they are different in that their flowers close upWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a pretty poem with a nice rhythm to it!. I don't get enough nature in my poetry so thanks for the description of the sundrop!.

Edit: In my opinion, thirst is a better choice than love; it conveys more!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this!. It reminds me of young love, in which I participated many years ago!.

You have captured the beauty of young love, along with some of its passion and fire!.

Not a new theme, but I don't think we can overdo expressing it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it as it shows a lot of emotion such as love, passion, lust, and need!. I think is is beautiful!. Keep up the good work and always write from the heart!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it very much!.!.!.maybe a tad long!.!.!.you could say it all with little less, I think!. Just my opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com