Do you think this poem is good?

Question: Do you think this poem is good!?

Hindered as the tide is low
I snipe at the swallow
A shot netted on it's head I land
And the swallow falls to sand
Challenging it's life I poke it with sticks
It is as still and silent as stones!.

Chilled I awake and think of her
Her shot as soft and silent as the archer!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's!.!.!. hard to read!. The rhythm of the words is hard to manage, which makes it difficult to understand!.

I like how you switched up the rhyme with sticks and stones!. ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com

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There, I got it out of my system! I've been wanting to do that ever since I've seen your name!. Now where was I!.!.!.!. Oh yeah your poem!. He's right my sweet, you need a rewrite like you need a Guggi handbag! And I love rewriting like I love the scent of a woman! Grade B

THE HUNTER
Hindered by the brambles brush,
Misty fall morning's quiet hush
In hunter's sight I did take aim,
A shot so fatal a life it claimed
It's heavy breath muffled and tore,
Until it breathed a breath no more
In field I dressed it an act so crude,
But this will be my winter's food
A hunter sharp with gun or bow,
I returned home from the white, cold snow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its a good poem rewright some of it and it will be perfectWww@QuestionHome@Com