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Question: Another poem!? how is it!?
Eat or be Eaten Alive:

Desperate attempt to win
sweat down my cheek
it's all or nothing
can't show them i'm weak

i hate this devil's game
one life at a time
waiting for my turn
my position is prime

they seraching for my corpse
i see them in the corner of my eye
bleeding on the battle field
spirit free and flying by

chrome gun in hand
they are ready to fire
we flee from them
it's their desire

a game of hide and seek
where no one comes back
everywhere is a dead end
they will follow my track

they are mass murderers
wanting just a little fun
they won't ever stop
till we're all dead and done

blood seaps through their clothes
dripping down to their toes
no one hears our cries of woe
running but with no where to go

no one is to be trusted
It's eat or be eaten alive
seing the sprawled bodies
wanting only to survive

i give up
on this endless fight
so be it
i'll die here tonightWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I see by your poem
it is about choices
( ultimatums )
its all or nothing
The title is like cannibalism
because eat or be eaten alive

seing the sprawled bodies
( seeing)
The poem is also battle because
people fight and no one wins
People cry but they are not heard
The last paragraph is about fight
because its either survival or deathWww@QuestionHome@Com

I got a little confused in the beginning because I thought it was about track running in a marathon or a school race or something like that!. I liked the fact that you used the word woe!.!.!.you hardly see words like that in poetry now a days!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That poem was heart wrenching, in a good way! Like a story that you grandfather wouldn't tell, because he'd be ummm dead!. I really like the vivid images and great word choice!. Keep writing, totally going somewhere!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is amazing! truly has a deep concept and is really inspirational!. in what form, i haven't figured out yet!. but i love it!. good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is fantastic!. That is!. Fantastic!. You're a born poet, Amelia!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you just got jackedddddddddddd ahaha naw im kiddingg i like it its very nicee :]Www@QuestionHome@Com

it was really good i liked it! ur really talented keep writing gurliee!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow!. that gave me chills!. you are amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com