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Question: Small revision to a poem i posted earlier!.!. thoughts!?
To the north there is a road,
With wooden fence on either side,
Between, dark dirt, a cart’s width wide
Caked down where people strolled!.

And if you feel a walk befitting,
To the left you’ll find some mossy knoll
Between sobbing willows at least as old
An envelope to men’s final sitting;
The dirt where trees now may grow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a fabulous poem!. My ONLY 2 small suggestions would be to uncapitalize the first letter of each line and let it flow better to the reader with some added punctuation!.
I would also change "befitting" in the second stanza to "fitting"!.
That's it!. This is simply beautiful writing!.


To the north there is a road
with wooden fence on either side;
between, dark dirt, a cart's width wide
caked down where people strolled!.

And if you feel a walk is fitting,
to the left you'll find some mossy knoll
between sobbing willows at least as old;
an envelope to man's final sitting,
the dirt where trees now may grow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Your way with words, seems comforting and inviting, to
want to take a stroll, I especially like the line
Between sobbing willows at least as old, usually refered to as "weeping"
Kudos, a welcome read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

befitting is too heavy,perhaps,a walk is your want,i do admire the overall idea,and it does conjour very well a scene everlasting!.well done!.its my genre!. john!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ka plump!

A great idea!. It almost kind of read like one of the lines from "Stairway To Heaven" by Led Zeppelin!. It is almost surreal in thought and very concise that takes you on a half tank trip!.!.!. Grade A -Www@QuestionHome@Com