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In times like these there is a hurt
When words aren’t enough to stop the pain
There are endless tears of turmoil
And nothing that is said will stop the rain

Inside the confusion lurks an anger
That no words of sorrow may diffuse
Riding through this storm of grief
Any evident relief seems at refuse

Only time will heal the wounds
And liberate from unending despair
love and friendship will ease the anguish
your beloveds soul is in my prayerWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
5/5!. That was beautiful!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Try to use other words to say the same thing!. Take each word and phrase and substitue them with better words/phrases!.

Unlike many of the poems I read on this site, your's at least has a point, but it is not finished!. Couldn't you do better than "there is a hurt"!? Since it doesn't have to rhyme, couldn't you say something like "a wound exists" or "a pain persists" or "when hurting rules"!. Something like that!. Take each line and study it, how could it be better!? Don't accept a line as done until you have tried it in many ways!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

In times like these there is hurt
When words aren’t enough
to stop the pain
Theres endless tears of turmoil
And nothing that is said
will stop the rain

Inside the confusion lurks anger
That no words of
sorrow may diffuse
Riding through storms of grief
Any evident relief
seems to refuse

Only time will heal wounds
liberate unending despair
love and friendship eases the anguish
beloved souls
i pray

or something like that lol!. sometimes you dont need to have more words init but you get the same idea!. hope i helped!. this poem is really good!. keep writing!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's really beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com